Comedy Writing Insights
Comedy Writing Insights
4. Introduction
Introduction
We are well into the 21st century and comedy films and television are in
abundance, and some would say an oversaturation. Maybe youre a
comedy writer, director or actor and are hitting the same bland dead ends in
your work? Enjoying humour is a historically universal theme, yet when sitting
down at your desk with your coffee, laptop at the ready and youre about to
write a comedic masterpiece, why is it that we over-process and over
calculate humour?
Attempting to gather up your awkward personal experiences: Loosing your
dog in the park, ruining that first date, tripping over a cable and knocking
things over or some extremely ironic scenario doesnt always translate to
the big screen. How do you make us care, and more so how can we find you
funny?
With this e-book we aim to provide you with some first hand knowledge from
sources that have hands on experience of what its like in the comedy biz.
Toying with dialogue would similarly have the same effect. A talking animal?
A swearing grandma? When people say what is not expected, or simply say
the wrong thing, we find their carelessness, humiliation or obtuseness funny,
and likewise the reaction of the unsuspecting recipient funny too.
The progression of dark humour, from the original spoofs and social
commentaries of the 1960s into the modern world, is one that is probably
considered the most relevantly funny today. In joking about matters that
arent deemed appropriate to joke about, our laughter- perhaps nervous at
first- allows for a release of tension surrounding the seriousness. Going back to
our Shakespearean comedies again, the subject matter, however dark,
convoluted or intangible, is approached in such a way that allows release
when humour is identified.
Despite dark humour being so popular, this is also a kind of comedy that is
unbearably hard to get right. If the jokes fall flat, or are too outlandishly
insulting, you may find yourself grappling with not only the attraction of the
audience, but also the sustaining of their interests.
As with all things, humour is a very objective and personal thing to have. It
can be very specific to ones taste, or even previous viewing experiences. In
this case, it might be worth considering that two heads are better than one.
When getting a gauge on humour, the more opinion you get (hopefully)
means the more successful you are in achieving laughs first time around. As a
writer, we know that youve read your way through hundreds of screenwriting
books, analysed the greats, read up for the important lectures. You know
what makes you laugh, how characters and plot work together and are
familiar with the various intricate stages of planning your plot, BUT you find
yourself incapable of writing a funny line of dialogue to achieve your long
sought after humour. It might be time to consider a collaboration.
On that note, the key thing to remember when attempting to write comedy is
to work with the skills that you already have. Anyone can fill a page with
cheap and easy jokes that fall flat. As a writer, the most important thing
about your story is how it sustains your audiences attention. At the same time
as our laughing at whats happening on screen, we need to stay absorbed
enough in the characters and their relationships in order to CARE about
following them through the rest of the plot. Whether you think its funny or not,
perhaps its worth working backward with the script, adding jokes in more
naturally as they come to you as you read over a completed story. It is far
harder to punch up captivating events in your film than adding in jokes.
Remember that we, as an audience, want to root for them and see them
meet their objective, the humour along the way is just a means of enjoying
the all-important story line of your feature even more.
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flawed, screwed-up world. In this world, our heroes have initial goals which
are short-sighted. (These initial goals will eventually be replaced by
discovered goals as the characters transform during the course of the
narrative.)
In Groundhog Day, Bill Murray is a news weatherman for a television station.
And in the beginning, we in the audience can see that hes sort of a cynical,
stunted soul, and that his way of being in the world might not be working for
him at all, whereas he thinks that all he really needs is to get a bigger
contract at a bigger station.
In This Is The End, our heroes Seth Rogen and Jay Baruchel are going through
a moderate bit of show business success. Seth thinks that hes living he good
life as long as he can party hearty and do more drugs and hang out with
James Franco. Jay, on the other hand, is very anti-Los Angeles, and looks
down on the aimless hedonism and career striving of his more successful
friend. But what Jays not aware of is that he still wants the same show
business success that his peers are attaining. On the one hand, doesnt want
to be like Seth and James Franco, but on the other hand, hes really a bit
jealous of them. Even though Jay carries more of the voice of reason in the
relationship, hes still not in a good placehis way of being in the world isnt
working for him.
In 40-Year-Old Virgin, Steve Carell, his goal is simply to wake up, go to work,
come back alone, make an omelette alone, play on his video games. To
him, thats the length and breadth of his world. And thats what hes
comfortable with, and thats how hes going to stay. In Tropic Thunder Robert
Downey Jr. and Ben Stiller just want to make this terrible Vietnam-era movie.
Initial goals are short-sighted and dont address inner needs.
In the 'Normal World', there are flawed or absent relationships.
In Groundhog Day, Bill Murray is kind of a misanthrope, and all his relationships
are superficial. Steve Carell in 40-Year-Old Virgin has no real relationships
except for the African-American couple who he shares viewing Survivor with.
He doesnt have any close friends, certainly no female relationships.
In This Is The End, we can see that the relationship between Seth Rogen and
Jay Baruchel is deeply flawed. Theyre not aware of it because both Jay has
kept secret that hes come to Los Angeles and purposely not gotten in touch
with Seth Rogen because he just thinks that Seth Rogen is a sell-out. And Jays
not really doing anything to repair these relationships.
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The Normal World can last anywhere from 5 to 25 minutes, setting up your
protagonists before the 'WTF', the big event, the catalyst thats going to send
everything spinning out of orbit. During this time, you want to plant many, if
not all, the seeds of conflict and resolution that are going to be developed in
the narrative and come into play in Acts 2 and 3. Its a truism of screenplay
writing that if you have Act 3 problems, theyre Act 1 problems. If youre stuck
in the Acts 2 or 3, its because you havent properly prepared for things in act
one.
One of the seeds youll plant in Act 1 is what we call Mask to Mensch. Your
protagonist starts off wearing a mask, a faade that hides, from himself as
well as us, the good man or woman he will eventually becomea mensch.*1
Your characters are pretending, most successfully to themselves, unaware of
the possibility that theres a better person inside. During the course of the
narrative, the mask is dropped and the good person, the mensch, emerges.
But in the Normal World, while we mostly see the false front, we need to see a
glimpse, no matter how fleetingly, of the person they might become.
In the Normal World, your theme is implied or hinted at. What the movie is
going to eventually be about needs to be alluded to without being hit on the
head. For instance, in Groundhog Day as theyre driving up to Punxatawney,
Chris Elliott turns to Bill Murray and says, What do you have against the
groundhog? I covered the swallows going back to Capistrano four years in a
row. And Bill Murray says, very offhandedly, Somebodys going to see me
interviewing a groundhog and think I dont have a future. Which is in fact
whats going to happen.
The theme is foreshadowed in the Normal World, and the more opportunities
you can have characters and dialogue allude to the theme, without putting
your thumb too heavily on the scales, the better. In Purple Rose of Cairo the
husband, Danny Aiello, repeats throughout the movie, Life is not like the
movies!. That foreshadows ironically what is about to happen as the fictional
character Jeff Daniels is playing is going to emerge from the screen and fall
in love with Mia Farrow.
Now you could write a draft and not know what your theme is. You could
write three drafts and not really know what your theme is. But at some point,
no matter how silly or light your comedy is, its got to be about something.
What are you talking about, the meaning of the movie, what it should mean
to us. At some point, either in your first draft or in your tenth draft, once you
figure out what your theme is, you want to go back to the beginning of the
movie and thread that through. Very lightly. Your premise, your high concept,
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may be the big selling point of the movie, the engine that sets everything in
motion and keeps it going, but the theme is the rudder. The theme guides
you in your choices.
In the movie Big, for instance, the theme is, Whats the nature of childhood?
Whats the nexus between being a child and being an adult? So in the
theme, when the Tom Hanks character has to get a job. He could have
gotten a job in a bank, he could have gotten a job in a gas station, but
thematically, it makes more sense to have him hook up with the head of a
toy company in FAO Schwarz because thematically thats what theyre
talking about.
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Funny is Money
By Baptiste Charles
Any film that's made you laugh could easily have been a drama. Tootsie? Oh
the yearning of breaking free from this prison Michael Dorsey has shackled
himself in! Facing an impossible dilemma, Dorothy Michaels asks for her
character to be written off, yet the executives won't do it, so she kills herself
on live television. The end. All the great comedies could have been made
into straight, serious dramas were it not for the gifts and hard work of their
makers.
So, at which point did the story change course? What makes the difference?
Humour is tragedy plus time, they say. Or distance: because, as Charlie
Chaplin said: "Life is a tragedy when seen in close-up, but a comedy in longshot."
So you start writing, and what have you got? A mess. You want to make the
next big comedy hit, following The Hangover, Bridesmaids, or Ted? Let's look
at some of the highest-grossing comedies, and study the serious business of
making comedy.
gossip columnist with whom he's smitten. The premise may not be ultra
elaborate, but if you insist more on the fact that the woman he's after is truly
exceptional than on the fact that he really can get them all, then you've got
what you need. The difference with the previous example is that being
chauvinistic, however wrong and unnerving, is more a habit than an identity.
In the case of Hitch, sweeping women off their feet is what he does -better
yet, that's who he is. When the conflict hits so close to home, you know the
character will go even further -thus providing more laughs.
Shrek ($484m) After his swamp is filled with fairy tale creatures, an ogre
agrees to rescue a princess for a villainous lord in order to get his land back.
What? A fairy tale with an ogre as the hero? The movie does an expert job at
taking your expectations of what a fairy tale is, and going the exact opposite
way, and does so brilliantly. Prince Charming is so handsome but so dimwitted. The reviled ogre who relishes mud baths actually has a heart as
gooey as the food he eats. (Aww) A fairy tale where characters have a life
outside the beaten path of the worn-out stories and you root for the
underdog? You've got the character, the conflict, the world. Where do I
sign? For more subverted expectations, wait till Step 5.
With a clear and expansive tagline, you've got a world of possibilities, you've
hooked your viewer, and if you've suggested a wide world of possibilities, you
know you'll be hired for sequels.
couldn't be more different: hers are rigorous and uptight, his are new-age,
liberated hippies. Need I say more? Yes. Yes, I do, as said liberated hippies
are played with immense glee by screen legends Dustin Hoffman and Barbra
Streisand.
When Harry met Sally ($92.8m) Harry and Sally have known each other for
years, and are very good friends, but they fear sex would ruin the friendship.
What's more primal than the difference between men and women? It doesn't
matter than most of it is socially constructed: it still makes for starkly different
worldview and hilarious misunderstandings.
Because comedy goes beyond just a wisecracking character and a few
good one-liners: it's about the collision of people and habits, hopeless
situations which will push characters to go the extra mile and outside their
comfort zone. Talking of which:
Miranda Priestly in The Devil Wears Prada ($326m): she walks into the building,
comes out of the elevator and gives instructions to her first assistant. That
could go many ways, but since she does so with such regal style, making
everyone scatter before her, all in a cool demeanour and with terrific lines
("Details of your incompetence do not interest me") delivered with over-thetop gusto by Meryl Streep, we've understood that she's not someone anyone
would want to mess with.
It's paramount that characters be well-defined, so that we see clearly who's
interacting with whom. They don't have to be people we like, but people we
take an interest in. Remember that, in The Devil Wears Prada, our way into
the story was Andrea, not Miranda, and it becomes growingly apparent that
Miranda is not just nasty for the sake of being nasty, she's just doing her job,
and her job is demanding.
is not meant to be subtle and -most importantly- the filmmakers know it too,
which makes for hilarious, touching mainstream blockbuster entertainment.
Those three examples are definitely in the offbeat brand, and you may want
to go for something more subdued. Subdued can be funny. Is your film a
comedy of manners? Do the laughs from characters? Let the story decide.
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1. LISTEN!
Character creation is less about creating, more about listening. In a script,
what do the other characters say about you? What labels do they put on
you? Play right into their expectations. What is your name? In ancient times
someones name determined their destiny and great care was given to the
naming of a person. So it is with writers. If youre playing Olivia Baxter your
status is high, your manner refined and perhaps youre a headstrong
socialite. If youre playing Deloris Clustermeyer perhaps youre cranky and
plain. The same goes for improv. What does your partner label you as?
Youre not my real Dad, your a deadbeat. Immediately you play a
deadbeat light up a cigarette, throw back a cold one, and sneer Just
cause I made your diapers out of newspaper. Or maybe your suggestion for
an open scene is ice -cream parlour What kind of people go to ice-cream
parlours? A squeaky-clean mommas boy or a hokey old lady. You can
even be informed by actual ice cream. You ask yourself: what is ice cream
like? and choose to play someone cold, slumped over and drippy.
2. LOOK!
What does your character look like? How old are they? What are they
wearing? What shoes are they wearing? Good character work begins with
the shoes. The shoes affect the way the character moves, how grounded
they are, how they feel. When rehearsing without costume, always make sure
you are wearing the actual costume shoes. Do they have an overbite? Play
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with your face. It may sound clich but starting with a strong facial quirk can
be a great way into a character. Think of Zoolanders signature pout or Amy
Poehlers naive grin as Leslie Knope on Parks and Rec.
3. SPEAK UP!
A strange or unique sounding voice can be a great jumping off point for a
character. Think of Ellen Green as Audrey in Little Shop of Horrors. Her
simpering sweet voice and low rent lisp is impossible to separate from this
character icon. Your characters voice says everything (pun intended).
Perhaps you have low self-esteem and are afraid to be heard so you speak in
the back of your throat. An insincere salesman is used to talking for a living, so
hell speak quickly with polished diction and soothing tones. Momma Rose
from Gypsy is driven and determined to see her daughters successful. Maybe
she believes the whole world is on her shoulders so her voice is heavy, intense,
powerful and guttural. Dont worry about being clich. If your character
voice is informed by these internal qualities you will always be original. In
improv, you can start from the outside in. A woman with a low, curt voice
might be a tollbooth operator with a poets soul, which is why her speech is
clipped, because her emotions are so deep.
4. JUDGE!
This may seem counter intuitive based on everything youve learned in acting
class but comedy is different. Funny characters are deeply flawed people
who against all odds think they can win. Thats why we love them. But they
are flawed and you must lovingly make fun of them. For an exercise, do an
impression of one of your parents. What is it in their personality drives you
crazy? Danny Coleman has a delicious time playing the sleazy, egomaniacal
twit Franklin Hart Jr. in 9 to 5 because he doesnt search for integrity or try
and find redeeming qualities. You can actually be two dimensional in
comedy. Isnt that fun for a change?!
5. AMP IT UP!
Take those character flaws and multiply them by 10 or even 100. Dont just be
a little dumb be D U M, Duuuumb! Case and point, Jeff Daniels & Jim Carey
in Dumb and Dumber. If youre supposed to be whiney let everything you do
and say be on the verge of tears. It is so much fun to watch an actor push
that characters flaws over the top. Similarly, whatever qualities are given in
the description, take beyond the natural. Dont be afraid of taking things too
far. In comedy, you go big or go home!
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One of the biggest mistakes that writers make is that theyre worried whether
the script is funny or not funny. But funny, as weve said, is subjective. What
comedians will tell you is that you cant live or die by whether this person or
that person laughs. You have to do your material and just trust that its
creating a comic picture, a comic portrait, and that comedy is not
predicated on how many jokes there are on the page. The worst sitcom you
can think of, the worst comic movie, the worst Rom-com, is chock full of
moments that theyre trying to make funny.
So whats comedy? In my seminar, we watch a lot of comedy clips, but one
of the most important clips we watch is from a daytime soap opera. When I
show it, occasionally people laugh. Taken out of context its pretty funny. OK,
its very funny. But why would we want to watch a soap to learn about
comedy? Heres the thing: Everybody involved in thisas writers, directors,
actors, designers and craftsmenis usually dedicated to not making you
laugh. So I think its instructive to pay attention to what are they doing and
the choices theyre making. Take a look at almost any soap scene. The first
thing you have to notice about people in soaps is that theyre more than just
good-looking, theyre almost supernaturally attractive. People like this just do
not exist in nature. And the combination of writing, directing and
performance is designed to communicate a specific set of qualities. Even
when the behaviour is extreme, i.e. adultery, murder and deceit, the staples
of daytime drama, the actors rarely act in an inappropriate manner, such as
that would tend to mock the characters. The actors playing the characters
are subtly saying to us: Look at me, look how sensitive I am, how much I'm
suffering, how deeply I feel, how intelligent I am. And Ill turn to the women in
the audience, and Ill say, Ladies, is this what your significant other is like?
Theres often a big laugh because obviously, theyre not.
The point is that drama helps us dream about what we can be, but comedy
helps us live with who we are.
Comedy helps us live with who we are because while drama idealizes mans
perfection and the tragedy of his falling short, comedy operates secure in the
knowledge of mans imperfection: insecure, awkward, fumbling unsureall
the core attributes of comedy. Doesnt this really describe us all? While
drama might depict one of us going through a dark night of the soul,
comedy sees the dark night, but also notices that, during that dark night,
we're still wearing the same robe we've had on for a few days and eating
chunky peanut butter out of the jar while sitting and watching Judge Judy.
Its still a dark night, but one that comedy makes more bearable by helping
us keep thingslike our lifein perspective.
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Comedy tells the truth, and specifically, it tells the truth about being human.
A comedian is simply the courageous person who gets up in front of a group
of strangers and admits, confesses to being human. In that if you have the
courage to tell the truth, and mostly the truth about yourself, and the truth
about the crazy things that you do, and the crazy way that you see the
world, then you have a good head start in creating comedy. So whats
comedy? The paradigm of comedy is an ordinary guy or gal struggling
against insurmountable odds without many of the required tools with which to
win, yet never giving up hope. It can almost be stated as an equation:
An ordinary guy or galJackie Gleason used to call him a mokestruggling
against insurmountable odds, without many of the required tools with which
to win, yet never giving up hope. From this paradigm or equation, we can
draw we can draw usable, practical tools, what we call the Hidden Tools of
Comedy. The tools are:
1Winning
2Non-Hero
3Positive (or Selfish) Action
4Active Emotion
5Metaphorical Relationship
6Straight Line/Wavy Line
First theres the tool of Winning. Winning is the idea that, in comedy, you are
allowed to do whatever you think you need to do in order to win. Comedy
gives the character permission to win. In winning, there are no shoulds.
Even if it makes you look stupid, you can do what you think you have to do in
order to win. Youre not trying to be funny, just trying to get what you want,
given who you are.
Next is Non-Hero. Non-hero is the ordinary guy who lacks some, if not all, of
the required skills with which to win. Note that we dont say comic hero, but a
non-hero. Not an idiot, not an exaggerated fool, but simply somebody who
lacks something. Or many things, but is still determined to win. The more skills
your character has, the less comic and the more dramatic the character is.
This is how you can shape the arc in a romantic comedy: in the romantic
moments, the heretofore clumsy or obnoxious hero becomes more sensitive,
more mature. Dont believe me? Take a look at Bill Murray in Groundhog
Day.
Positive Action, or selfish-action, or hopeful action, is the idea that every
action your character takes, your character actually thinks is going to work,
no matter how stupid, or foolish or naive that might make him or her appear.
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It also takes the nasty edge off of characters such as Basil Fawlty in Fawlty
Towers or Louie DePalma in Taxi.
Active Emotion is the idea that the emotion that occurs naturally in the
course of trying to win. The emotion that is created simply by being in the
situation is the exact right emotion to be having.
Metaphorical Relationship is the tool of perception. Its the idea that beneath
every surface relationship is a true, or essential, metaphorical relationship.
Each character perceives others around him, and the world itself, in specific,
metaphorical ways. Think about the couples you know. Some fight like cats
and dogs, some coo to each other like babies and some are like business
partners: OK, I cant have sex with you this Thursday, but if I move some
things around, I might be able to squeeze it in Sunday afternoon, barring no
further complications. Even thought theyre a married couple, their
metaphorical relationship is that of nose-to-the-grindstone business partners.
Its Oscar and Felix, two middle-aged divorced roommates, acting like an old
married couple. And its Jerry and George, sitting in the back of a police car,
acting like kids: Hey, can I play with the siren?
And last, but not least, the tool that challenges the conventional view of
comedy: Straight Line/Wavy Line. John Cleese once said that when they
started Monty Python, they thought that comedy was the silly bits: "We used
to think that comedy was watching someone do something silly...we came to
realize that comedy was watching somebody watch somebody do
something silly." There is the mistaken belief that in every duo theres the funny
guy and the straight guy. In Whos On First? its obvious that Lou Costello,
the short, fat, roly-poly bumbler is the funny man of the team, whereas tall,
thin, severe Bud Abbott is the straight man. This misconception misses the
essential truth about comedythat it is a team effort, where each member
of the team is contributing to the comic moment. The real dynamic is that of
watcher and watched, the one who sees and the one who does not see; the
one creating the problem and the one struggling with the problem. Think of
Kramer in Seinfeld. The comedy isnt just watching Kramer behave in his
typically outrageous fashion, the comedy requires Jerry or George or Elaine
to watch it in bemused amazement.
The tool of straight line/wavy line recognizes this. Its the idea that not only do
we need someone, some funny person, to do something silly or create a
problem, we also need someone who is acting as the audiences
representative to watch that person do something silly or struggle to solve the
problem that has been created. The other character might not be as verbal,
might not be doing the funny things, but because the other character is also
a non-hero, he or she sees the problem, but doesnt have the skills to solve it.
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The straight line creates the problem, like he has blinders on, and is actually
blind to the problem or is creating the problem themselves. The wavy line
struggles, but is unable to, solve the problem. So what the wavy line does
more than not is simply doing a lot of watching. Watching without knowing
what to do about it, so theres confusion. Theres consternation. Whereas the
other characters are doing something as John Cleese would saysilly. And
its that combination that creates the comic moment, as opposed to
somebody simply getting hit with a pie in the face.
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