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Descriptive Writing - Annotated Example

(1) The document provides an example of descriptive writing about a chocolate cake. It describes the cake's appearance, smell, and taste in vivid detail using the senses. (2) The passage uses techniques like present tense, informal tone, and vivid descriptions to bring the cake to life for the reader. (3) It depicts the cake as "perfection on a plate" through its layers, icing, and blend of rich chocolate, crisp raspberry, and sugary sweetness.

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Descriptive Writing - Annotated Example

(1) The document provides an example of descriptive writing about a chocolate cake. It describes the cake's appearance, smell, and taste in vivid detail using the senses. (2) The passage uses techniques like present tense, informal tone, and vivid descriptions to bring the cake to life for the reader. (3) It depicts the cake as "perfection on a plate" through its layers, icing, and blend of rich chocolate, crisp raspberry, and sugary sweetness.

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Descriptive Writing

Example of Descriptive Writing

Purpose
To describe a person, place or thing so that your writing creates a picture in the
reader’s mind.

The Chocolate Cake


(1) Perfection on a plate. Mum’s famous

Oreintation
chocolate cake (2) is on the bench and it is
perfect. (1) It’s a feast for the senses, not
only does it smell amazing, it looks delicious and
I know it will taste wonderful. 6
(1) Begins with a hook/opening
4) It is a sight to behold, the sunlight (2) statement that gives a clear idea of
what is being described.
filtering through the window makes the sugary
(2) Present tense.
icing (3) sparkle like glitter. The three layers
(3) Vivid descriptions.
Body Paragraph

of the cake are stacked tall and (3) look like


a tasty tower. The bottom layer, all cakey (4) Descriptive detail, e.g. senses.
goodness, each crumbly morsel coming together (5) Informal tone to draw
to be a strong base for the rest to stand on. reader in.

The middle layer, (3) oozing down the sides, (6) Is organized appropriately into
paragraphs.
is raspberry jam, glistening in the light. The top 6
(7) Simple closing statements to end
layer, cake again, finished off with the glossy the writing in a satisfying way.
icing. Mmmmmm, I can’t wait.

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Descriptive Writing
(4) The entire kitchen is full of the scent of
the cake. Every time I breathe in, (5) my
head spins with how awesome this cake smells.

Body Paragraph
First, you get (3) a wave of rich chocolate,
delectable and luxurious. Then you get a bit of
the crisp, sweet raspberry cutting through, sharp
enough to cut the thick smell of cocoa. The final
(1) Begins with a hook/opening
layer of smells is the sugary icing (5) topping 6 statement that gives a clear idea of
it all off with a waft of pure sweetness. what is being described.
(2) Present tense.
(4) With one taste of this magnificent cake, I (3) Vivid descriptions.
am in heaven. (3) The velvety chocolate dances (4) Descriptive detail, e.g. senses.
with the tart raspberry jam on my tongue, (5) Informal tone to draw
Body Paragraph
before being swept away by the wave of icing. reader in.
The cake crumbles in my mouth, merging all the (6) Is organized appropriately into
flavours into one perfect mouthful. The raspberry paragraphs.
jam is sticky and glues the cake crumbs together (7) Simple closing statements to end
the writing in a satisfying way.
as I chew them and the icing melts and fills my 6
whole mouth before I swallow it all down.
Ending

(7) It looks perfect, it smells perfect, it tastes


perfect. This cake is truly perfection on a plate.
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