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Exercise 1:
Directions: The following passage is an early draft of an essay. Some parts of the passage
need to be rewritten. Read the passage and select the best answers for the questions that
follow. Some questions are about particular sentences (or parts of sentences) and ask you to
improve sentence structure and word choice. Other questions refer to the entire essay (or
parts of the essay) and ask you to evaluate the organization and development. In making
your decisions, follow the conventions of standard written English. After you have chosen
your answer, fill in the corresponding oval on your answer sheet.

Questions 1-5 are based on the following (11) Vocals also play an important role in
essay, which is a brief description of bluegrass bluegrass. (12) The lead vocal is often taken by
music. a tenor. (13) Bill Monroe had a high lonesome
sound. (14) He was perhaps the greatest
(1) Bluegrass is a wonderfully challenging bluegrass tenor. (15) His voice was sometimes
style of music. (2) Most bluegrass songs are joyful and at other times deeply sad, and it set
played at rapid tempos and are very intricate. the standard for all bluegrass singers to follow.
(3) This requires speed and precision on the (16) Most bluegrass bands feature four to seven
part of a musician if it is to be played well. (4) singers who often join together in harmony.
Excellence in bluegrass requires a musician to (17) The singing, like the instrumental playing,
be tremendously devoted. (5) The bluegrass requires exacting precision of each musician.
player must be willing to devote countless (18) When performed well, the results are
hours to practicing difficult scales and spine-tingling.
flourishes in order to play the music properly.
(6) Most great bluegrass musicians learn to 1. Which of the following best replaces
the word It at the beginning of

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play in the style of the great bluegrass masters
and are usually able to reproduce their sentence 15?
predecessors’ music note for note. (A) The soloist
(7) Bluegrass gives musicians the chance to
(B) Monroe’s singing
express themselves musically. (8) They did this
when improvising solos over the chords of a (C) The chord
song. (9) The musician may choose to play the (D) The devoted musician
melody of the song or to create a new melody of (E) The four-part harmony
his or her own creation. (10) When performed
by a masterful musician, a bluegrass solo is a
truly exhilarating experience.

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2. Which sentence, if inserted at the 4. Which of the following, in the context

beginning of the second paragraph, of the rest of the passage, best describes
would best link paragraph 2 to the purpose of the third paragraph?
paragraph 1? (A) To prove the greatness of Bill
(A) I know one bluegrass musician Monroe
who can play “Earl Foggy (B) To reveal the solution to a great
Mountain Breakdown” exactly mystery
the way it is played on the
(C) To introduce a new aspect of the
famous recording of the song.
main subject
(B) Among the great masters of
(D) To disprove arguments outlined in
bluegrass music, Ralph Stanley is
the second paragraph
probably my favorite.
(E) To describe problems associated
(C) Bluegrass is not merely about the
with the subject
ability to imitate great musicians,
however. 5. In context, which of the following is
(D) Jazz is another form of music in the best way to combine and revise
which improvisation plays an sentences 13 and 14 (reproduced
important part. below)?
(E) A traditional bluegrass band has a Bill Monroe had a high lonesome sound.
banjo, guitar, mandolin, fiddle, He was perhaps the greatest bluegrass
and upright bass, but there is tenor.
rarely a set of drums. (A) Having a high, lonesome sound, of
all bluegrass tenors perhaps the
3. In context, which of the following is
greatest was Bill Monroe.
the best way to revise the underlined
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(B) With his high, lonesome sound,

portion of sentence 8?
the greatest perhaps of bluegrass
They did this when improvising solos over
tenors was Bill Monroe.
the chords of a song.
(C) Perhaps being the greatest
(A) will do this improvising solos
bluegrass tenor, the sound of Bill
(B) do so whenever they improvise Monroe was his high, lonesome
solos sound.
(C) did this when solos were (D) With his high, lonesome sound,
improvised Bill Monroe was perhaps the
(D) had done this by improvising solos greatest bluegrass tenor.
(E) have done this by solo (E) He was perhaps the greatest
improvisation bluegrass tenor having a high,
lonesome sound was Bill Monroe

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Exercise 2:
Directions: The following sentences test correctness and effectiveness of expression. In
choosing answers, follow the requirements of standard written English. Pay close attention
to grammar, choice of words, sentence construction, and punctuation.
In each of the following sentences, part of the sentence or the entire sentence is underlined.
Beneath each sentence you will see five ways of phrasing the underlined part. Choice A
repeats the original; the other four options are different.
Choose the answer that best expresses the meaning of the original sentence. If you think
the original is better than any of the alternatives, choose option A; otherwise, choose one of
the others. Your choice should produce the most effective sentence—clear and precise,
without any awkwardness or ambiguity.

Example:

Daniel is fastidious about the way he maintains his CDs; each is filed in its own
place according to release year and record label.
(A) each is filed in its own place
(B) each having their own place
(C) where each has its own place
(D) having a place of its own
(E) they each have places of their own A B C D E

1. As a result of a mysterious cloud that 2. Developing alternative fuels that create

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settled overnight, therefore the town was fewer pollutants while they burn are
evacuated in the early morning hours. among the ways that industry attempts
(A) overnight, therefore the town was to avoid an environmental crisis.
evacuated (A) are among the ways that industry
(B) overnight, the town was evacuated attempts to address
(C) overnight; therefore, they evacuated (B) is a way industry attempts the
the town address of
(D) overnight there was an evacuation (C) is one way that industry is
by the town attempting to avoid
(E) overnight, evacuating the town (D) are among attempts that industry
makes while addressing
(E) are among industry’s attempts that
address

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3. Despite the pressure tactics that several 5. When Mozart composed his opera The
powerful lobbying groups used to Marriage of Figaro, Bach’s fugues had
convince the senator, failing to dissuade recently been heard by him, and their
her from voting against the bill they influence was incorporated brilliantly.
supported. (A) Bach’s fugues had recently been
(A) failing to dissuade her from heard by him, and their
(B) and yet their failure to dissuade influence was incorporated
her of brilliantly
(C) she was not dissuaded from (B) Bach’s fugues had recently been
heard by him, and he brilliantly
(D) she was a failure at dissuading
incorporated it
them from
(C) Bach’s fugues had recently been
(E) yet she was failing to dissuade
first heard by him and their
from
influence brilliantly incorporated
4. In most states, convicts sentenced to (D) he had recently heard Bach’s
public service are required to fugues, which he was brilliant in
demonstrate contrition for their crime incorporating the influence of
as well as performing certain tasks for a (E) he had only recently heard Bach’s
predetermined number of hours. fugues, but he incorporated their
(A) as well as performing certain tasks influence brilliantly
for a predetermined number of
hours 6. David Alfaro Siqueiros, regarded by
historians as one of Mexico’s greatest
(B) and also they perform a number of
painters, he created many large-scale
hours of tasks, which are
murals depicting leftist political
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predetermined
themes.
(C) along with a predetermined
(A) painters, he created
number of hours of tasks, which
they must perform (B) painters, created
(D) and public service must also be (C) painters, and creating
performed for hours, the number (D) painters by creating
of which is predetermined (E) painters when he created
(E) as well as to perform certain tasks
for a predetermined number of
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Exercise 3:
Directions: The following sentences test your knowledge of grammar, usage, diction
(choice of words), and idiom.
Some sentences are correct.
No sentence contains more than one error.
You will find that the error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. Elements of the
sentence that are not underlined will not be changed. In choosing answers, follow the
requirements of standard written English.
If there is an error, select the one underlined part that must be changed to make the
sentence correct and fill in the corresponding oval on your answer sheet.
If there is no error, fill in answer oval E .
Example:

A crowd of demonstrators have gathered outside the headquarters of the Federal Reserve
A
Board, and the leader of the group is demanding that the board chairman lower interest
B
rates so that small businesses can borrow money more easily. No error
C D E
A B C D E

1. No matter how often we hear about the 3. Although the first edition of Leaves of
A
necessity of eating well and exercising Grass met with critical success, poet

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B
regularly, you still find it difficult to Walt Whitman continued to revise the
C D A
avoid the temptations of fatty foods and volume throughout his life, drastically
B
inactivity. No error reworking it many times between 1855
E C D
2. By automating more procedures during and 1892. No error
A E
takeoff and landing, the Federal 4. Both the chairperson of the department

Aviation Administration is pursuing and the faculty advisor wanted to be

B A
a goal of having less human errors that a participant in the colloquium, but the
C D B C
can cause accidents. No error dean informed them that only one spot
E D
was available. No error
E
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5. Many activist organizations have learned 9. Deer, once considered entirely benign
A A
that they are more likely to win positions creatures, are now known to carry an
B B
in local governments and not in the infectious tick whose bite can cause
C C D
national government; accordingly, they permanent damage to the human heart

have refocused their efforts on local and nervous system. No error

D E
elections. No error
E 10. It is amazing that marathoners can run

6. The principal noticed that students 26 miles in just over two hours when you
A
were growing increasingly unruly as he consider that most people cannot barely
B C A B
announced a new series of strict campus walk that distance, much less run it
C D
regulations designed to curtail quickly. No error
D E
vandalism and truancy. No error
E 11. A recent study indicates that those job

7. When considering the ramifications of applicants which mentioned a company

A
cloning, there is questions not only employee among their references
A B
about the practical and scientific aspects received no preferential treatment from
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of the process, but also about ethical those in charge of hiring. No error
B C D C D E
issues. No error
E 12. Most historians would suggest that the
A B
8. The explosion of artillery echoed, study of history is as crucial to the
C
reverberant through the valley, survival of humanity as the study of
A D
bouncing off the nearby canyon walls, agriculture, biology, or any other life
B
and returning to the military firing science. No error
C E
range a split second later. No error
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Exercise 4:
Directions: The following passage is an early draft of an essay. Some parts of the passage
need to be rewritten. Read the passage and select the best answers for the questions that
follow. Some questions are about particular sentences (or parts of sentences) and ask you to
improve sentence structure and word choice. Other questions refer to the entire essay (or
parts of the essay) and ask you to evaluate the organization and development. In making
your decisions, follow the conventions of standard written English. After you have chosen
your answer, fill in the corresponding oval on your answer sheet.

Questions 1-6 are based on the following (15) Perhaps because of these qualities, the
essay, which is a proposal for a new monu- monument will create a new and unexpected
ment in town. source of income for our town’s economy.

(1) Not too long ago, the legislators of our 1. In the context of the passage, which is
town met and agreed that a monument should the best version of the underlined
be built to honor the many local World War II portion of sentence 2 (reproduced
veterans. (2) Businesses began to take up below)?
collections to fund the project, and customers Businesses began to take up collections to
were asked by them to make donations. (3) fund the project, and customers were asked
The mayor sent a letter to every citizen by them to make donations.
describing the proposed monument. (4) It
pointed out, however, that without taxes the (A) (As it is now)
funds would have to be given voluntarily. (5) It (B) Businesses begin to take up
urged everyone to give as much as possible so collections to fund the project
that the monument could be built soon, while and to ask customers

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at least some veterans are living. (6) The letter (C) Beginning to take up collections to
promised that no new tax would be imposed to
fund the project were businesses,
pay for the monument. (7) I agree. (8) What
which asked customers
good is money if it is not used for noble
purposes? (D) Businesses began to take up
(9) Citizens should make a strong effort to collections to fund the project
support this worthy cause. (10) They came and to ask customers
from our town and fought bravely during (E) The project was supported by
World War II. (11) It is a disgrace that our businesses who began to take up
town has not honored them sooner, but better collections to fund it and
late than never.
customers who were asked
(12) This monument may even provide
unintended benefits to our town. (13) The
proposed monument is very beautiful. (14) It
will be the only one of its kind in the area.

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2. The writer could best improve the 5. Which of the following describes the
passage by making which of the author’s main goal in the second
following changes to sentence 6? paragraph of the passage?
(A) Change the period to a question (A) To describe the proposed
mark. monument
(B) Change promised to promises. (B) To identify potential problems
(C) Move the sentence so that it with the mayor’s plan to raise
appears between sentences 3 money
and 4. (C) To suggest projects more
(D) Move the sentence so that it worthwhile than the proposed
appears between sentences 1 monument
and 2. (D) To scold those citizens who
(E) Delete the sentence from the avoided military service during
passage. World War II
(E) To convince others to donate
3. Which of the following should be money to the monument project
inserted at the beginning of sentence 8?
(A) Despite this, 6. Which of the following is the best way
to revise and combine sentences 13 and
(B) However,
14 (reproduced below)?
(C) After all,
The proposed monument is very beautiful.
(D) Although
It will be the only one of its kind in the
(E) Therefore, area.

4. The word They in sentence 10 would (A) Being the only one of its kind in
the area, the proposed
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best be replaced by which words?

monument is very beautiful.
(A) The citizens
(B) Because it will be the only one of
(B) The veterans
its kind in the area, the proposed
(C) The legislators monument is very beautiful.
(D) The contributors (C) The only one of its kind in the
(E) The tourists area is the beautiful proposed
monument.
(D) The proposed monument, which
will be the only one of its kind in
the area, is very beautiful.
(E) As the only one of its kind in the
area and also a very beautiful
proposed monument.

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Exercise 5:
Directions: The following sentences test correctness and effectiveness of expression. In
choosing answers, follow the requirements of standard written English. Pay close attention
to grammar, choice of words, sentence construction, and punctuation.
In each of the following sentences, part of the sentence or the entire sentence is underlined.
Beneath each sentence you will see five ways of phrasing the underlined part. Choice A
repeats the original; the other four options are different.
Choose the answer that best expresses the meaning of the original sentence. If you think
the original is better than any of the alternatives, choose option A; otherwise, choose one of
the others. Your choice should produce the most effective sentence—clear and precise,
without any awkwardness or ambiguity.

Example:

Daniel is fastidious about the way he maintains his CDs; each is filed in its own
place according to release year and record label.
(A) each is filed in its own place
(B) each having their own place
(C) where each has its own place
(D) having a place of its own
(E) they each have places of their own A B C D E

1. Because the land is extremely sandy is 2. In many areas of the world, people are
why the contractor believes it would be turning to soybeans as a protein source

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impossible to build there. because they are cheap to grow, provide
(A) sandy is why the contractor other important nutrients, and the fats
believes it would be impossible to they contain are less harmful than
build there animal fats.
(B) sandy, the contractor believes it (A) provide other important nutrients,
impossible to be building there and the fats they contain
(C) sandy, the contractor believes it (B) important nutrients are provided,
would be impossible to build and contain fats that
there (C) provide other important nutrients,
(D) sandy, the impossibility of building and contain fats that
there is the contractor’s belief (D) providing other important
(E) sandy is why it is impossible to nutrients, and containing fats that
build there, is what the contractor (E) important nutrients are provided,
believes and fats are contained that

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3. Johnny Cash wears dark clothing and 5. Bifocal eyeglasses contain two-part
sings in an unadorned voice, these lenses, and it allows the wearer to see
qualities contribute to his folksy image into the distance and read a book
as “the man in black.” without changing eyewear.
(A) these qualities contribute to his (A) Bifocal eyeglasses contain two-part
folksy image as “the man in lenses, and it allows
black.” (B) Bifocal eyeglasses contain two-part
(B) and these qualities contribute to his lenses, which allow
folksy image as “the man in (C) Bifocal eyeglasses, with their two-
black.” part lenses, allows
(C) and the result of these (D) Two-part lenses in bifocal
contributions being his folksy eyeglasses allows
image as “the man in black.”
(E) Two-part lenses are in bifocal
(D) while these qualities contributing eyeglasses, and this is what allows
to his folksy image as “the man in
black.” 6. Under new regulations, citizens must
separate their recyclables into different
(E) his folksy image as “the man in
trash bins, which are color-coded to
black” is the result of this
indicate their purpose.
contribution.
(A) Under new regulations, citizens
4. A high-cholesterol diet, even among must separate their recyclables
otherwise healthy adults, is more likely into different trash bins, which
to contribute to heart disease than are color-coded to indicate their
someone who has a low-fat diet. purpose.
(A) than someone who has a low-fat (B) Color-coded to indicate their
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diet purpose, citizens must separate

(B) than would a low-fat diet their recyclables into different
trash bins under new regulations.
(C) as opposed to a low-fat dieter
(C) Citizens must use different trash
(D) in contrast to someone who has a
bins under new regulations to
diet that is low in fat
separate their recyclables, which
(E) compared to a low-fat dieter are color-coded to indicate their
purpose.
(D) Citizens separating their
recyclables into different trash
bins, were indicated by color
coding under new regulations.
(E) Under new regulations, using trash
bins color-coded to indicate their
purpose, citizens separate their
recyclables.

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Exercise 6:
Directions: The following sentences test your knowledge of grammar, usage, diction
(choice of words), and idiom.
Some sentences are correct.
No sentence contains more than one error.
You will find that the error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. Elements of the
sentence that are not underlined will not be changed. In choosing answers, follow the
requirements of standard written English.
If there is an error, select the one underlined part that must be changed to make the
sentence correct and fill in the corresponding oval on your answer sheet.
If there is no error, fill in answer oval E .
Example:
A crowd of demonstrators have gathered outside the headquarters of the Federal Reserve
A
Board, and the leader of the group is demanding that the board chairman lower interest
B
rates so that small businesses can borrow money more easily. No error
C D E
A B C D E

1. Recycling programs provide 3. The members of the committee were

A
communities with the means to dispose divided at the issue of whether to
B A
of some refuse in a productive manner, approve increased expenditures without
C

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but it also create an increased workload first providing for an increase in
D B
for local governments, which must revenues, even though all agreed that
C
administer the programs. No error the expenditures were essential.
E D
2. An adjustment to the prime rate may No error
E
appear inconsequential to most 4. The mysteries of the ocean floor have
A B A
Americans, but it actually can intrigued scientists for centuries, but
C B
dramatically alter all aspects of the in recent years, rapid developments in

economy, from the rate of growth to the submarine design has allowed divers
D C
cost of goods. No error to investigate the region firsthand.
E D
No error
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5. Our field trip was canceled even though 9. Hickory trees usually have taproots
A
the sun was shining this morning so deep that they cannot be easily
A B
because atmospherical conditions transplanted, since damage to the
B C
point to the likelihood of heavy taproot would almost certainly result
C D D
storms by noon. No error in the death of the tree. No error
E E
6. In 1926, the Olympic medalist 10. As in most athletic disciplines, the goal
A
Gertrude Ederle swum across the of bodybuilding exercises are not
B A
English Channel, becoming the first merely to create an attractive
C B
woman to accomplish this difficult physique, but also to engage in an
D C
feat. No error activity that contributes to a
E D
comprehensive approach to healthful
7. Behaviorists understand many
A
living. No error
things about animals, but to date
E
they have yet to come up with an 11. Although most concede that the
B C
explanation of wild creatures’ content of programming will probably
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fascination for shiny objects. remain unchanged, critics who have

D A
No error seen high-definition television
E
broadcasts claim that they provide
8. During the 1920s, American investors
B C
an image as enthralling than any
borrowed heavily in order to
D
A
previously seen in any medium.
purchase stocks on Wall Street,
No error
believing that it would earn a quick
E
B C
enough return to pay off their debts and

reap a considerable profit.

D
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Exercise 7:
Directions: The following passage is an early draft of an essay. Some parts of the passage
need to be rewritten. Read the passage and select the best answers for the questions that
follow. Some questions are about particular sentences (or parts of sentences) and ask you to
improve sentence structure and word choice. Other questions refer to the entire essay (or
parts of the essay) and ask you to evaluate the organization and development. In making
your decisions, follow the conventions of standard written English. After you have chosen
your answer, fill in the corresponding oval on your answer sheet.

Questions 1-5 are based on the following essay, (16) When I arrived at the street corner,
which is a story about the power of the press. which had been so empty the day before, I could
not believe my eyes. (17) I saw a large audience
(1) I had always heard about the power of the awaiting my performance. (18) The article had
press, but I didn’t really believe it: in a world truly worked to create a crowd that couldn’t
filled with newspapers, magazines, and wait for my performance.
television programs, how much difference could
one little story in a newspaper make? (2) People 1. Read the underlined portions of
might read it and they might not. (3) Either sentences 2 and 3 (reproduced below).
way, they’d never remember it. Which of the following is the best way
(4) I have enjoyed juggling ever since I can to revise the underlined portion in order
remember. (5) Other people participate in sports to combine the two sentences?
or play a musical instrument. (6) I spend my People might read it and they might not.
spare time keeping clubs, oranges, and bean Either way, they’d never remember it.
bags airborne. (7) I know it’s an unusual hobby,
but I don’t care. (8) One day I decided that I (A) and they might not, and either way
was good enough at juggling to try performing they’d never remember

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for people. (9) I go to a busy street corner in our (B) and they might not, but either way,
city and start doing some of my favorite juggling they’d never remember
tricks. (10) Not many people watched, which (C) and, on the other hand, they might
was very discouraging, but one fellow did. (11)
not, however they’d never
He told me that he worked for the newspaper
remember
and that he was going to write a story about me.
(12) Sure enough, the article appeared in the (D) and, they might not, but either way
paper the next day. (13) My parents thought without ever remembering
that I should go to my corner again, convinced (E) and they might not, either way
that many people would show up to see me they would have no memory of
because of the news story. (14) To make them
happy, I went. (15) I read the story and enjoyed
it but really didn’t think too much about it.

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2. Which of the following sentences, if 4. Sentence 15 would better fit the narrative
added after sentence 3, would do the flow of the passage if it appeared
best job of connecting the first (A) before sentence 4
paragraph to the rest of the passage?
(B) after sentence 11
(A) I very rarely read the newspaper
(C) after sentence 12
myself.
(D) after sentence 18
(B) A television news story might
(E) at the beginning of the next
attract more attention, though.
paragraph
(C) Still, I always thought I might
enjoy working at a newspaper. 5. Which of the following is the best way
(D) Recently, however, I had an to combine sentences 5 and 6
experience that changed my (reproduced below)?
opinion. Other people participate in sports or play a
(E) Some scientists believe that people musical instrument. I spend my spare time
remember less than one tenth of keeping clubs, oranges, and bean bags
what they see and hear. airborne.
(A) Unlike other people, who participate
3. In the context of the passage, which of
in sports, keeping clubs, oranges,
the following identifies the most
and bean bags airborne is how I
obvious problem with sentence 9?
spend my time.
(A) The verbs should be in the past
(B) As opposed to people participating
tense rather than the present
in sports or playing a musical
tense.
instrument, I am spending my
(B) The sentence is too long and spare time keeping clubs,
should be divided into two oranges, and bean bags airborne.
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shorter sentences.
(C) Other people participate in sports
(C) The sentence should be in the or play a musical instrument, I
passive voice rather than the spend my spare time keeping
active voice. clubs, oranges, and bean bags
(D) A comma should be inserted airborne.
between the words city and and. (D) Other people participate in sports
(E) The final punctuation should be a or play a musical instrument, but
question mark rather than a period. I am different from that as I
spend my spare time keeping
clubs, oranges, and bean bags
airborne.
(E) While other people participate in
sports or play a musical
instrument, I spend my spare
time keeping clubs, oranges, and
bean bags airborne.
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Exercise 8:
Directions: The following sentences test correctness and effectiveness of expression. In
choosing answers, follow the requirements of standard written English. Pay close attention
to grammar, choice of words, sentence construction, and punctuation.
In each of the following sentences, part of the sentence or the entire sentence is underlined.
Beneath each sentence you will see five ways of phrasing the underlined part. Choice A
repeats the original; the other four options are different.
Choose the answer that best expresses the meaning of the original sentence. If you think
the original is better than any of the alternatives, choose option A; otherwise, choose one of
the others. Your choice should produce the most effective sentence—clear and precise,
without any awkwardness or ambiguity.

Example:

Daniel is fastidious about the way he maintains his CDs; each is filed in its own
place according to release year and record label.
(A) each is filed in its own place
(B) each having their own place
(C) where each has its own place
(D) having a place of its own
(E) they each have places of their own A B C D E

1. Because raw potatoes contain solanine and chaconine, which are poisonous in large

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quantities, is why they should be cooked well before eaten.
(A) Because raw potatoes contain solanine and chaconine, which are poisonous in
large quantities, is why they should be cooked well before eaten.
(B) Because they contain solanine and chaconine that is poisonous is why raw
potatoes should be cooked well before they can be eaten.
(C) Poisonous solanine and chaconine is the reason why, before they can be eaten,
raw potatoes should be cooked well.
(D) Because raw potatoes contain solanine and chaconine, which are poisonous in
large quantities, potatoes should be cooked well before they are eaten.
(E) Before they can be eaten, because they contain a solanine and chaconine, raw
potatoes must be cooked well.

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2. In 1998 John Glenn became the oldest 4. Although the path was blocked by a
astronaut to orbit Earth, he was 77 seemingly insurmountable wall of
years old at the time. snow, the rescue team decided to
(A) In 1998 John Glenn became the continue on with its mission rather
oldest astronaut to orbit Earth, he than abandon the trapped campers.
was 77 years old at the time. (A) continue on with
(B) In 1998, 77-year-old John Glenn (B) continue forward with
became the oldest astronaut to (C) continue
orbit Earth.
(D) try and continue
(C) Orbiting Earth in 1998, John
(E) keep on continuing
Glenn became the oldest astronaut
to orbit it, at the age of 77. 5. Regarded by many as one of the
(D) With his orbit of Earth in 1998, greatest American novelists, Mark
that was when John Glenn Twain wrote eloquently of such
became the oldest astronaut to distinctly American themes as the
orbit Earth when he was 77 years distrust of authority and the spirit of
old. egalitarianism.
(E) The oldest astronaut to orbit Earth (A) Mark Twain wrote eloquently of
was when John Glenn did so at such distinctly American themes
the age of 77 in 1998. (B) Mark Twain was writing
eloquently of such distinctly
3. Whether the people of Papua New
American themes
Guinea really migrated or did not from
(C) Mark Twain included among his
Australia thousands of years ago can
eloquent writing such distinctly
never be known definitively; however,
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American themes
since Papuans have distinctive physical
traits in common with Australian (D) Mark Twain eloquently examined
aborigines, many geneticists are such distinctly American themes
convinced that a direct lineage is likely. (E) the writing of Mark Twain is
(A) Whether the people of Papua New eloquently examining such ?
Guinea really migrated or did not distinctly American themes
(B) If in reality the people of Papua
New Guinea migrated or did not
(C) The reality of whether the people
of Papua New Guinea migrated
(D) Whether the people of Papua New
Guinea really migrated
(E) That New Guinea’s Papua people
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Exercise 9:
Directions: The following sentences test your knowledge of grammar, usage, diction
(choice of words), and idiom.
Some sentences are correct.
No sentence contains more than one error.
You will find that the error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. Elements of the
sentence that are not underlined will not be changed. In choosing answers, follow the
requirements of standard written English.
If there is an error, select the one underlined part that must be changed to make the
sentence correct and fill in the corresponding oval on your answer sheet.
If there is no error, fill in answer oval E .

Example:
A crowd of demonstrators have gathered outside the headquarters of the Federal Reserve
A
Board, and the leader of the group is demanding that the board chairman lower interest
B
rates so that small businesses can borrow money more easily. No error
C D E
A B C D E

1. The Rock and Roll Hall of Fame takes 3. The workings of congressional
A A
pride in the fact that they have been committees are as mysterious to those
B B
able to generate fan interest in albums who serve on them as they are to
C C

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that stopped selling decades ago. outsiders, at least according to the
D D
No error memoirs of one recently retired
E
congressperson. No error
2. Latisha is undoubtedly the best student E
A
in the class; that is why the teacher 4. Among many Americans who are
B
assigned the most difficult project to approaching retirement age, there is
C A B
she and her best friend Janice. No error growing concerns over whether the
D E
Social Security trust fund will remain
C
solvent long enough to continue to pay
D
benefits. No error
E

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5. The most difficult problem in training 9. Because the teacher had taught the
A
pets that once lived in the wild is lesson many times before, he is
A B
overcoming the defense mechanisms reasonably certain that he will be able
B
he or she learned in order to survive. to present the material tonight
C D C
No error without much difficulty. No error
E D E

6. Although all the neighbors were upset 10. The need for legislation to ban
A A
when the government decided to place sweatshops became tragically apparent
B B
a refuse-processing plant nearby, none in 1911, when the poorly constructed

would ever have condoned the actions Triangle Shirtwaist Company factory
C
of the protester who attempted to set caught fire, killing the 146 women
C
fire to the plant. No error which were working there. No error
D E D E

7. Many health-conscious diners prefer 11. The court-appointed attorney attempted

A A
free-range animals to those bred by to defend her client against the charges,
B B
agribusiness, even though no study but she lacked the time and resources
C D
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is proving that one is more healthful needed to prepare a viable case. No error
C D E
than the other. No error
E 12. Both the conductor and also the
A
8. The Green Bay Packers of the National singer are in agreement that the
A B C D
Football League won the first two Super horn section is the weakest
B
Bowls, which followed the 1966 and component of the ensemble. No error
C E
1967 seasons, but they did not win

them again until 1997, when they

D
defeated the New England Patriots. No

error
E

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Exercise 10:
Directions: The following passage is an early draft of an essay. Some parts of the passage
need to be rewritten. Read the passage and select the best answers for the questions that
follow. Some questions are about particular sentences (or parts of sentences) and ask you to
improve sentence structure and word choice. Other questions refer to the entire essay (or
parts of the essay) and ask you to consider organization and development. In making your
decisions, follow the conventions of standard written English. After you have chosen your
answer, fill in the corresponding oval on your answer sheet.

Questions 1-6 are based on the following essay, home and employ Americans. (15) The
which is about keeping businesses in the government should impose greater tariffs on
United States. goods that enter the United States from
overseas, even those made by American
(1) An increasing number of American companies. (16) Activists should encourage
businesses these days are moving part of their consumers to buy only goods that are made in
operations out of the country, and this state of America. (17) Remember, if American jobs go
affairs means potential problems for our overseas, Americans will be out of jobs and will
nation. (2) Businesses operate overseas because not have the money to buy goods. (18) Therefore,
it is cheaper to build factories and hire workers it is in business’s interest to keep Americans
there. (3) Another reason is that government employed.
regulations are less strict outside the United
States. 1. Of the following, which is the best way
(4) One company that moved part of its to revise the underlined portion of
operations overseas is the Seabridge Tool and sentence 1 (reproduced below)?
Die Company. (5) The company used to own a An increasing number of American
plant in my hometown. (6) It employed over businesses these days are moving part of

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one thousand workers. (7) The workers their operations out of the country, and this
manufactured hand tools and dies. (8) Dies are state of affairs means potential problems
special tools used to press and shape cold
for our nation.
metals. (9) More companies are likely to move
their operations outside the United States in the (A) country— a state of affairs that
future. (10) Every company tries to cut costs, could result in problems for our
and moving overseas is one surefire way to nation
reduce the cost of labor as well as other items. (B) country and, with this come
(11) But, as the Seabridge Company learned, potential problems for our nation
there are also drawbacks to moving. (12) Bad
(C) country, and potential problems
publicity and unexpected expenses associated
for our nation is the result
with operating in a new country can wipe out
any savings associated with moving. (D) country; along with it our nation
(13) There are a few things that should be faces a problematic state of affairs
tried to convince companies to stay in the (E) country, and they are causing
United States. (14) The government should potential problems for our
offer tax breaks as incentives to remain at nation’s state of affairs

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2. Of the following, which is the best way 3. The purpose of the second paragraph is
to combine sentences 5, 6, and 7 best described by which of the
(reproduced below)? following?
The company used to own a plant in my (A) To criticize those who disagree with
hometown. It employed over one thousand the author
workers. The workers manufactured hand tools (B) To examine a failed government
and dies. policy
(A) The company, which manufactures (C) To demonstrate a point by example
hand tools and dies, once owned a
(D) To reconcile an apparent
plant that employed over one
contradiction
thousand workers in my
(E) To recount the experiences of one
hometown.
Seabridge employee
(B) It employed over one thousand
workers in my hometown, it owned 4. Which sentence in the second paragraph
a plant, and its workers LEAST relates to the main idea of the
manufactured hand tools and dies. paragraph?
(C) Workers once manufactured hand (A) 4
tools and dies in a plant in my (B) 8
hometown owned by the
(C) 10
company that hired over one
thousand workers. (D) 11
(D) Once employing over one thousand (E) 12
workers in my hometown, the
5. Sentence 9 would better tie into the
company manufactures hand tools
second paragraph if it were preceded by
and dies.
which of the following?
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(E) As an employer of over one

(A) Therefore,
thousand workers, the hand tool
and die manufacturing company (B) As a result,
used to own a plant in my (C) Like Seabridge,
hometown. (D) However,
(E) You know,

6. In context, which of the following

phrases would be the best substitute for
the phrase things that should be tried
in sentence 13?
(A) studies that should be conducted
(B) differences that can be reconciled
(C) companies that should be regulated
(D) policies that should be pursued
(E) mysteries that should be solved

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Exercise 11:
Directions: The following sentences test correctness and effectiveness of expression. In
choosing answers, follow the requirements of standard written English. Pay close attention
to grammar, choice of words, sentence construction, and punctuation.
In each of the following sentences, part of the sentence or the entire sentence is underlined.
Beneath each sentence you will see five ways of phrasing the underlined part. Choice A
repeats the original; the other four options are different.
Choose the answer that best expresses the meaning of the original sentence. If you think
the original is better than any of the alternatives, choose option A; otherwise, choose one of
the others. Your choice should produce the most effective sentence—clear and precise,
without any awkwardness or ambiguity.

Example:

Daniel is fastidious about the way he maintains his CDs; each is filed in its own
place according to release year and record label.
(A) each is filed in its own place
(B) each having their own place
(C) where each has its own place
(D) having a place of its own
(E) they each have places of their own A B C D E

1. The local theatrical performance of 2. Although the rhinoceros beetle sports a

Tennessee Williams’s Cat on a Hot Tin pair of large, intimidating horns, it is
Roof comparing favorably to the classic actually a harmless insect that is more

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movie version. remarkable for its strength than for its
(A) comparing favorably to the classic appearance.
movie version (A) it is actually a harmless insect that
(B) it compared favorably, considering is more remarkable for its
the classic movie version strength than for its appearance
(C) which compared favorably to the (B) they are harmless and are more
classic version in the movies remarkable for their strength
than appearance
(D) compared favorably to the classic
movie version (C) it is harmless and more remarkable
for being strong than the way it
(E) when compared with the classic
looks
movie version was favorable
(D) it is actually harmless but more
remarkable for being strong than
for being this way
(E) they are remarkably harmless and
strong despite their appearance

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3. Michelle broke her toe when she 5. Members of the winning team in the
collided into the goal post she had to World Series receive a dazzling gold and
be removed from the game. diamond commemorative ring and
(A) when she collided into the goal earning a considerable bonus.
post she had to be removed from (A) and earning a considerable bonus
the game (B) as well as a considerable bonus
(B) when she collided into the goal (C) as well as they earn a considerable
post; she had to be removed from bonus
the game
(D) and also earning a considerable
(C) and had to be removed from the bonus
game, she collided into the goal
(E) additionally they get to earn a
post
considerable bonus
(D) and she collided into the goal
post, which removed her from 6. Due to increasing demand for their
the game skills, beginning computer programmers
(E) colliding into goal post, she was are now finding themselves earning
removed from the game as a more than or as much as some well-
result established lawyers.
(A) more than or as much as
4. Though it first appeared on the music
(B) as much as, or even more than,
scene as an obscure genre, hip-hop has
(C) at least as much, or even more,
now entirely permeated mainstream
than
entertainment; which means it is
played on everything from commercial (D) at least as much as
radio to movie soundtracks. (E) more, or at least as much, than
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(A) mainstream entertainment; which

7. Before undertaking a difficult project,
means it is played
one should assess both how much work
(B) mainstream entertainment, who it will require and the satisfaction of
plays it the end result.
(C) mainstream entertainment, (A) the satisfaction of the end result
playing it
(B) is the end result going to be
(D) mainstream entertainment; that satisfactory
gets played
(C) if the end result will be satisfied
(E) mainstream entertainment; it can
(D) how satisfying the end result will
be heard
be
(E) the end result’s likelihood of
coming out satisfactorily

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Exercise 12:
Directions: The following sentences test your knowledge of grammar, usage, diction
(choice of words), and idiom.
Some sentences are correct.
No sentence contains more than one error.
You will find that the error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. Elements of the
sentence that are not underlined will not be changed. In choosing answers, follow the
requirements of standard written English.
If there is an error, select the one underlined part that must be changed to make the
sentence correct and fill in the corresponding oval on your answer sheet.
If there is no error, fill in answer oval E .

Example:
A crowd of demonstrators have gathered outside the headquarters of the Federal Reserve
A
Board, and the leader of the group is demanding that the board chairman lower interest
B
rates so that small businesses can borrow money more easily. No error
C D E
A B C D E

1. Having shattered numerous major- 3. A group of scholars with expertise in

A
league batting records, Pete Rose can international studies have organized a
A
convincingly argue that he is one of the national colloquium to meet on March 1;
B B

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most best hitter’s in the history of the its subject will be the necessity of
C D C
game. No error integrating the African world into the
E D
Western economy. No error
2. In the nineteenth century, many novels E

were published in serial form and sold 4. The human eye cannot perceive the
A A
to subscribers; it allowed novelists moment of impact that occurs when a
B B
to compose their works one chapter at a baseball bat meets a baseball because of
C C
time and to continue them for as long as how quick the two objects approach
D D
readers remained interested. No error and repel one another. No error
E E

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5. When Jimmy Carter and Walter 9. It was the intent of the framers of the
A
Mondale joined to form the winning Bill of Rights that American citizens
A
ticket in the 1976 presidential election, will enjoy the rights to freedom of
B
he could not have anticipated the speech, freedom of religion, and
B C
Iranian hostage crisis that would freedom of the press for as long as the
D C
ultimately lead to the demise of the union stands. No error
D E
administration. No error
E 10. As chief justice of the United States

6. Devastated by the loss of their home to Supreme Court, Earl Warren advocated
A A
flooding, the Marvell family moved to a “equal justice” for all; today, nearly 30
B B
location far from the coast and starting years after his death, his legacy
C D C
life over in the mountain town of continues to play a major role in our
D
Asheville. No error legal system. No error
E E

7. Once Persian forces had fallen quickly 11. I voluntarily gave up my position
A
to his army, Alexander the Great as center of the basketball team when I
A
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encountered little difficulty in realized that Harlan was much better

B B C
convincing all the other nations of Asia suited to the position than me. No error
C D E
Minor to submit to his rule. No error
D E 12. Orestes, a figure in Greek mythology,

8. Under the rules of competitive golf, a takes revenge of Aegisthus and

A A
player may neither ask an opponent for Clytemnsetra after he discovers that the
B
advice or offer advice to an opponent. two of them had murdered his father
B C D C
No error many years earlier. No error
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Exercise 13:
Directions: The following passage is an early draft of an essay. Some parts of the passage
need to be rewritten. Read the passage and select the best answers for the questions that
follow. Some questions are about particular sentences (or parts of sentences) and ask you to
improve sentence structure and word choice. Other questions refer to the entire essay (or
parts of the essay) and ask you to evaluate the organization and development. In making
your decisions, follow the conventions of standard written English. After you have chosen
your answer, fill in the corresponding oval on your answer sheet.

Questions 1-7 are based on the following essay, 1. Which of the following is the best
which is an argument in favor of improving revision of the underlined portion of
the food in the cafeteria. sentence 2 (reproduced below)?
At a time when all products and services in
(1) Our school needs better food in the
our country seem to be improving rapidly, it
cafeteria. (2) At a time when all products and
is a shame that our cafeteria food remains
services in our country seem to be improving
the same drab, unpleasant fare that it has
rapidly, it is a shame that our cafeteria food
remains the same drab, unpleasant fare that it been since the days our parents attended
has been since the days our parents attended this school.
this school. (A) Improving products and services in
(3) The problems with our current cafeteria our country at a rapid pace, our
are numerous. (4) The cooks seem to have little cafeteria food shamefully
understanding of how long food should be
(B) All products and services in our
cooked, so they overcook everything. (5) And
country seem to be improving
they also seem to believe that anything will
rapidly, our cafeteria food
taste good if they add enough salt to it. (6) It is

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not that hard, also, to prepare food well. (7) (C) Since rapid improvement in all
Anybody with a watch and a light touch with products and services in our
spices can make food that is healthy, delicious, country seems to be happening,
and pleasing to the eye. (8) Whether prepared what a shame our cafeteria food
for two people or two thousand, pastas, (D) This is a time at which all products
vegetables, and meats are all easy to prepare.
and services in our country seem
(9) Our cafeteria is always ruining these dishes.
to be improving rapidly, but it is
(10) There are possible solutions to this. (11)
the food in our cafeteria that
A restaurant, perhaps a fast-food chain, could
take over our food service. (12) A committee of (E) At a time when all products and
students and administrators could plan menus. services in our country seem to be
(13) No matter how the situation is addressed, improving rapidly, our cafeteria
it is important that students voice their concern food
over the matter. (14) The food has been bad at
this school for many years; the situation won’t
change until students make clear how
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2. The word also in sentence 6 could best 5. In context, which of the following is
be replaced by which of the following the best revision of sentence 9
words? (reproduced below)?
(A) however Our cafeteria is always ruining these
(B) and dishes.
(C) therefore (A) Our cafeteria ruined these dishes
and always will.
(D) but
(B) Somehow, our cafeteria always
(E) definitely
manages to ruin these dishes.
3. Which of the following is the best way (C) In addition, our cafeteria can ruin
to revise and combine the underlined these dishes.
portion of sentences 4 and 5 (D) These same dishes were always
(reproduced below)? ruined by our cafeteria.
The cooks seem to have little understand- (E) Therefore, it is our cafeteria that
ing of how long food should be cooked, so always ruins these dishes.
they overcook everything. And they also
seem to believe that anything will taste 6. In context, sentence 10 would be most
good if they add enough salt to it. clear if the author changed the word
(A) everything, also they this to which of the following?
(B) everything, furthermore they also (A) these people
(C) everything; they also (B) this school
(D) everything: also they (C) these decisions
(E) everything and also (D) this problem
(E) this opinion
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4. Which of the following is the best

revision of the underlined portion of 7. Which of the following would most
sentence 8 (reproduced below)? strengthen the third paragraph?
Whether prepared for two people or two (A) Ridiculing past students who did
thousand, pastas, vegetables, and meats not speak up about the cafeteria
are all easy to prepare. problem
(A) (as it is now) (B) Providing more details about the
(B) meats: they are all easy to prepare writer’s suggested alternatives
(C) and meats were easily prepared (C) Describing the method for
preparing vegetables properly
(D) and meats have been prepared
easily (D) Acknowledging that some food at
the cafeteria might actually be
(E) and even meats would be easy to
good
prepare
(E) Mentioning other school problems
that do not relate to the cafeteria

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Exercise 14:
Directions: The following sentences test correctness and effectiveness of expression. In
choosing answers, follow the requirements of standard written English. Pay close attention
to grammar, choice of words, sentence construction, and punctuation.
In each of the following sentences, part of the sentence or the entire sentence is underlined.
Beneath each sentence you will see five ways of phrasing the underlined part. Choice A
repeats the original; the other four options are different.
Choose the answer that best expresses the meaning of the original sentence. If you think
the original is better than any of the alternatives, choose option A; otherwise, choose one of
the others. Your choice should produce the most effective sentence—clear and precise,
without any awkwardness or ambiguity.

Example:

Daniel is fastidious about the way he maintains his CDs; each is filed in its own
place according to release year and record label.
(A) each is filed in its own place
(B) each having their own place
(C) where each has its own place
(D) having a place of its own
(E) they each have places of their own A B C D E

1. French cuisine is justly honored for its 2. The pedals on a steel guitar allow a
development of several techniques that musician to alter the pitch of notes by
is essential to preparing thick and as much as a whole step and he can
satisfying sauces. change the volume as well.

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(A) that is essential to preparing thick (A) and he can change
and satisfying sauces (B) as well as changing
(B) essential to the preparation of (C) also allowing for changing
thick, satisfying sauces (D) so he can change
(C) that are essential to prepare sauces (E) and to change
with thickness and satisfaction
3. Carla received a letter of commendation
(D) essential at preparing sauces, which
from the department chairperson, this
are thick and satisfying
endorsement helped her gain entry into
(E) for essentially preparing thick,
a prestigious graduate program.
satisfying sauces
(A) this
(B) as a result of the
(C) and this
(D) that was the
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4. The beach was quickly rebuilt as a 6. Byron has decided that he would rather
result of substantial state aid and was study music as opposed to contemporary
nearly destroyed by last year’s floods. art, the focus of his previous studies.
(A) The beach was quickly rebuilt as a (A) as opposed to
result of substantial state aid and (B) than
was nearly destroyed by last (C) from
year’s floods. (D) in contrast with
(B) The beach was quickly rebuilt as a (E) rather than
result of substantial state aid, last 7. The two girls spend their afternoons
year it was nearly destroyed by searching for shamrocks, which is
floods. enjoyable to them.
(C) The rebuilding of the beach was, as (A) The two girls spend their afternoons
a result of substantial state aid, searching for shamrocks, which is
quick after being destroyed by enjoyable to them.
floods last year. (B) Searching for shamrocks, it is an
(D) The beach, which was nearly enjoyable way to spend
destroyed by last year’s floods, afternoons for the two girls.
was quickly rebuilt as a result of (C) The two girls find that spending
substantial state aid. their afternoons searching for
(E) The beach, which was quickly shamrocks is enjoyable.
rebuilt as a result of substantial (D) The two girls, who spend their
state aid, being nearly destroyed afternoons searching for
by last year’s floods. shamrocks, which is enjoyable.
(E) An enjoyable way to spend an
5. The Dewey Decimal Classification afternoon, the two girls search
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System assigns a different number to for shamrocks.

every book according to classification,
8. For an optimist, seeing a situation in its
its purpose being to make it easier to
most positive light is better than
find books in large collections, such as
picturing all the disasters that may
libraries.
occur.
(A) classification, its purpose being (A) seeing a situation in its most
(B) classification; its purpose is positive light is better
(C) classification: as for its purpose, it (B) keeping sight of a situation’s most
is positive light is better
(D) classification; and its purpose, (C) it is better to keep sight of a
situation in its most positive light
(E) classification so that
(D) sight of a situation in its most
positive light is better
(E) to have seen a situation in its most
positive light is better

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