Senior High School
Creative Nonfiction
Quarter 1 – Week 6
Revising a Short Piece
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Creative Nonfiction
Alternative Delivery Mode
Quarter 1 – Module 3: Revising a Short Piece
First Edition, 2020
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Senior High School
Creative Nonfiction
Quarter 1 – Week 6
Revising a Short Piece
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Introductory Message
For the facilitator:
Welcome to the Creative Nonfiction Alternative Delivery Mode (ADM) Module on
Revising a Short Piece.
This module was collaboratively designed, developed, and reviewed by the Office of
the Curriculum Implementation Division, DepEd City of Naga to assist you, the
teacher, or facilitator in helping the learners meet the standards set by the K to 12
Curriculum while overcoming their personal, social, and economic constraints in
schooling.
This learning resource hopes to engage the learners in guided and independent
learning activities at their own pace and time. Furthermore, this also aims to help
learners acquire the needed 21st-century skills while taking into consideration their
needs and circumstances.
Also, you will see this box in the body of the main text in this module:
As a facilitator, you are expected to orient the learners on how to use this module,
encourage and assist them as they do the tasks, and track their progress while
allowing them to manage their learnings.
For the learner:
Welcome to the Creative Nonfiction Alternative Delivery Mode (ADM) Module on
Revising a Short Piece.
The hands are one of the most symbolized parts of the human body. They often used
to depict skill, action, and purpose. Through your hands, you may learn, create, and
accomplish. Hence, the hands in this learning resource signify that you, as a learner,
is capable and empowered to successfully achieve the relevant competencies and
skills at your own pace and time. Your academic success lies in your own hands!
This module was designed to provide you with fun and meaningful opportunities for
guided and independent learning. You will be enabled to process the contents of the
learning resource while being an active learner.
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This module has the following parts and corresponding icons:
This will give you an idea of the skills or
What I Need competencies you are expected to learn in the
to Know module.
This part includes an activity that aims to
What I check what you already know about the lesson
Know to take. If you get all the answers correct
(100%), you may decide to skip this module.
This is a brief drill or review to help you link
What’s In
the current lesson with the previous one.
In this portion, the new lesson will be
What’s New In
introduced to you in various ways; a story, a
song, a poem, a problem opener, an activity or a
situation.
This section provides a brief discussion of the
What Is It
lesson. This aims to help you discover and
understand new concepts and skills.
This comprises activities for independent
practice to solidify your understanding and
What’s More skills of the topic. You may check the answers
to the exercises using the Answer Key at the end
of the module.
What I Have This includes questions or blank sentence /
paragraph to be filled into process what you
Learned learned from the lesson.
What I Can This section provides an activity which will help
you transfer your new knowledge or skill into
Do
real life situations or concerns.
This is a task which aims to evaluate your level
Assessment of master in achieving the learning competency.
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Additional In this portion, another activity will be given to
Activities you to enrich your knowledge or skill of the
lesson learned.
This contains answers to all activities in the
Answer Key
module.
At the end of this module, you will also find:
References This is a list of all sources used in developing
this module.
The following are some reminders in using this module:
1. Use the module with care. Do not put unnecessary mark/s on any part of the
module. Use a separate sheet of paper in answering the exercises.
2, Don’t forget to answer What I Know before moving on to the other activities
included in the module.
3. Read the instruction carefully before doing each task.
4. Observe honesty and integrity in doing the tasks and checking your answers.
5. Finish the task at hand before proceeding to the next.
6. Return this module to your teacher/facilitator once you are through with it.
If you encounter any difficulty in answering the tasks in this module, do not
hesitate to consult your teacher or facilitator. Always bear in mind that you are
not alone.
We hope that through this material, you will experience meaningful learning and
gain deep understanding of the relevant competencies. You can do it!
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What I Need to Know
You are already on the last module of this quarter. This week’s module asks
you to revise the draft of a short piece using any of the literary conventions of a genre
(e.g. plot for narrative piece) HUMSS_CNF11/12-Ib-d-7. Specifically, this week’s
lesson aims to make you to revise a short piece following the conventions and literary
elements you have learned from the previous modules.
What I Know
Now, let’s do a basic proofreading on the selections below. Do this activity in your
notebook.
Name: ________________________________________
Editing: How many mistakes can you find?
The Beach
Do you no Ryan did last weekend. He went to the beach
with his family. First, Ryan builded a huge sand castle. Then ,
he collect seashells and rocks After that, he goed swimming
with his brother. Ryan has a wonderful time at the beach.
https://www.superteacherworksheets.com/proofreading.html
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Name: ________________________________________
Editing: How many mistakes can you find?
Anthony Visits Nick
On sunday, Anthony went over to Nicks house to play
basketball. They played a gam of one-on-one. Anthony
made six baskets, bute nick made eight Nick was the winner.
After the game, both boys whent inside to have some
snack’s and watch television.
https://www.superteacherworksheets.com/proofreading.html
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Lesson Revising a Short Piece
What’s In
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“Good stories are not written. They are rewritten.” These are famously
written by Phillis Whitney that is true to every work of fiction and nonfiction
texts. Revising is away to learn about the craft of writing.
What’s New
Try to pair the meaning of the word with its correct definition. Put an
arrow to match the word and its meaning.
REVISING PROOFREADING EDITING
Checking the spelling Review, alter and amend Focus on surface and
and grammar Formatting
What Is It
Reflect on this question:
How significant is revising, proofreading and editing in writing creative
non-fiction texts?
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Learning to revise teaches you creative nonfiction writers about the characteristics of
good writing, which will carry into your future writing. Though the focus of creative
nonfiction is on the story and tone, its literary techniques and styles, details have to
be written in a clear speech so readers understand the message conveyed.
Let’s first identify the three important aspects of revising a draft by distinguishing
revising, editing and proofreading.
REVISING
➢ This requires you to review, alter, and amend. As a writer you need to make
sure every part of your story serves a purpose. This follows drafting and
precedes editing.
➢ The focus of revision is whether or not you’ve achieved all the goals you set for
your writing.
➢ Ask your own work: “do all the pieces fit together? Is your tone appropriate?
Does every character play a role in the story?”
➢ At this stage, you need to consider your audience as well as the content of
your writing.
EDITING
➢ This requires you to check the spelling and grammar of each sentence. This
follows revising and precedes proofreading.
➢ The objective during this stage is to make sure everything flows properly.
PROOFREADING
➢ Focuses on surface and formatting errors such as spacing and typos. This is
considered the final stage before publishing.
➢ It’s usually done after you have a final copy of your formatted work.
ADDITIONAL TIPS TO PONDER IN SELF-EDITING YOUR NON-FICTION
TEXTS
Use the active voice
Example:
“This chapter was rewritten until it was good enough to publish” (BAD)
“I rewrote this article until it was good enough to publish.”
(GOOD)
Eliminate unnecessary words
Example:
“I wrote my non-fiction article as fast as the wind.” (BAD)
“I wrote my first draft in thirty minutes.” (GOOD)
Cut 10% of your work
If you’re struggling to reduce your word count, ask yourself, “Is this
sentence confusing?” or “What’s the weakest section in this draft?”
Simplify clunky language
New writers sometimes include big words and long sentences to impress
their readers. Instead, rewrite sentences until it can be read by graders.
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Review your punctuation choices
Don’t write in all caps or overuse italics. This applies to your articles,
social media posts and even emails.
Replace repeated words
Avoid using the same word over and over and over. It bores your
readers.
Include transition words
These words bridge one sentence to the next and connect different
ideas. They’re kind of like small talk before a difficult conversation. You
can pick from hundreds, including:
- Moreover
- Initially
- And yet
- However
- What’s more
Now I guess, you have learned more than enough to start crafting your
own creative nonfiction article.
What’s More
Independent Activity 1: SPOTTING BASIC GRAMMAR ERRORS
Directions: Decide which part of the sentence is grammatically incorrect. Write the
letter that corresponds to your choice in your answer sheet.
1. I enjoyed study geography at school and now I’ve enrolled at the Economics
A B C D
Faculty.
2. I used to be keen of all scientific subjects but now I would prefer to study art.
A B C D
3. I want meet your sister when she comes to see you – she sounds very nice.
A B C D
4. My friends tell the English exam is quite difficult but I’m not worried.
A B C D
5. The tickets, which are extremely good value, can be buy from large
A B C D
supermarkets.
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6. The number of people which asked for the discount was low but grew during
A B C D
the summer period.
7. He wanted always to be a doctor and after doing medicine he now works in a
A B C D
hospital.
8. The informations they gave us was not very helpful so I consulted the website
A B C D
instead.
9. There isn’t many time, do you think we should get a taxi to the exhibition
A B C D
centre?
10. He graduated in languages in June and is now thinking of do a second degree
A B C D
in psychology.
11. The policeman showed us an identikit picture of the man who steal the car.
A B C D
12. How long does it take to get the station on foot from your house
A B C D
13. I was so angry that I took the watch broken to the jewellers to get my money
A B C D
back.
14. He rang me this morning for tell me that he had passed his driving test.
A B C D
15. I won’t be able to go on holiday this year unless I will get a part-time job.
A B C D
Independent Assessment 1:
➢ Did you able to spot all the basic grammar errors in the activity?
➢ If not, read it again and recheck your answers.
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What I Have Learned
Let’s sum up what we have learned from this module by answering the following
questions?
▪ What are the important steps in revising a nonfiction text?
_______________________________________________________
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▪ Differentiate revising from editing and proofreading in your own words.
_______________________________________________________
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Assessment
Directions: Write the letter that corresponds to your choice in your answer
sheet.
1. Which of the following is the correct sequence in rewriting one’s work?
A. Editing->Proofreading->Revising
B. Revising-> Proofreading->Editing
C. Revising-> Editing-> Proofreading
2. What is usually done after you have a final copy of your formatted work?
A. Revising B. Editing C. Proofreading
3. Which of the following is not an example of a transition word?
A. Neither B. besides C. clearly
4. Which of the following is a better version of this sentence: “He dropped out of
school on account of the fact that it was necessary for him to help support his family.”
A. He dropped out of school to help support his family.
B. He dropped out of school because it was necessary for him to support his
family.
C. He dropped out of school to support his family.
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5. Which of the following is the better version of this sentence: “Trouble is caused
when people disobey rules that have been established for the safety of all.”
A. Disobeying safety regulations causes trouble.
B. Trouble is caused by people’s disobedience.
C. Disobedience causes trouble to people.
For items #6-10, read the story below and answer the questions that follow.
STEPS TO MAKE SPAGHETTI
_____________collect the ingredients. __________ put water into the pot and turn on
the stove. ____________ you wait, start cooking the sauce. When the water is boiling,
put the noodles into the pot. ___________ ten minutes, drain the noodles with a
colander. __________, add the sauce and cheese.
6. Which word fits best at the first blank?
A. Next B. Finally C. First
7. Which word fits best at the second blank?
A. Next or Then B. First or Finally C. Next or First
8. Which word fits best at the third blank?
A. Finally B. While C. Next
9. Which word fits best at the fourth blank?
A. After B. While C. Next
10. Which word fits the last blank?
A. Finally B. While C. First
For items #11-15, change the following sentences from passive to active voice. Encircle
the letter that corresponds to the best option.
11. New workers were hired by the company last year.
A. The company hires new workers last year.
B. The company hired new workers last year.
C. The company had hired new workers last year.
12. As my mom said, elders should be respected.
A. As my mom said, “respects your elders.”
B. As my mom said, “you should respect your elders.”
C. As my mom said, “Respect your elders.”
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13. Once a week, the house is cleaned by Berto.
A. Once a week, Berto cleaned the house.
B. Once a week, Berto cleans the house.
C. Once a week, Berto has cleaned the house.
14. Baywalk’s Christmas lights opening was visited by many tourists.
A. Many tourists visited Baywalk’s Christmas lights opening.
B. Many tourists had visited Baywalk’s Christmas lights opening.
C. Many tourists have visited Baywalk’s Christmas lights opening.
15. The fire in Mandaue had been put out before the fire brigade arrived.
A. Someone has put out the fire in Mandaue before the fire brigade arrived.
B. Someone had put out the fire in Mandaue before the fire brigade arrived.
C. Someone have put out the fire in Mandaue before the fire brigade arrived.
Additional Activity
WRITING ABOUT YOUR MODULE EXPERIENCE
Directions: This activity allows you to write about your overall experience with the
modular learning modality used this first quarter.
Your task is to write a 250-word essay that describes everything you felt, observed,
experienced, and seen during the first quarter of this modular learning.
Write your answer on a separate sheet of paper. After writing your first draft, reread
and correct your own work using the skills of revising, editing and proofreading. Use
red ballpoint pen for the corrections. Once done, proceed to writing your second
draft.
FIRST DRAFT
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REVISED DRAFT
Rubrics for Grading
Criteria Masterful Skilled Able Developing Novice Actual
(5pts) (4 pts) (3 pts) (2 pts) (1 pts) Score
Outline,
Focus,
Purpose,
Thesis
(Controlling
Idea) 5
points
Ideas,
Support and
development
(Evidence) 5
points
Structure,
organization
5 points
Sentence
Structure
(Grammar)
5 points
Presence of
literary
elements 5
points
Total Score
(25 points)
Signed:________________________________
Teacher’s signature over printed name
Date Signed:___________________
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RESOURCES:
Online Sources
Creative Nonfiction: An Overview. November 26, 2020. Retrieved from
owl/purdue.edu/owl/sub
A Complete Guide to Writing Creative Nonfiction. December 2, 2020. Retrieved
from masterclass.com/articles/completguide-writing-creative-nonfiction/
Exercises in Wiritng Concise Sentences. December 2, 2020. Retrieved from
grammar.ccc.commnet.edu>quizzes
Creative Nonfiction. December 3, 2020. Retrieved from
https://www.creativenonfiction.org/online-reading/what-creative-nonfiction
Conciseness in Writing. December 3, 2020. Retrieved from
global.oup.com>chapter3>exercises
Clarity- the key to effective writing.. November 29, 2020. Retrieved from
thgmwrites.com/blog/clarity-key-to-writing/
Eliminating Wordiness Exercise 1// Purdue Writing Lab. December 4, 2020.
Retrieved from owl.purdue.edu> sentence_style>exercises
Book
SyGaco, Sonia. Writing Techniques in Creative Nonfiction. Quezon City: Great
Books Trading. 2017.
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ANSWER KEY
PRE-TEST
ACTIVITY
RYAN’S WEEKEND
(indent) Do you know what Ryan did last weekend? He went to the
beach with his family. First, Ryan built a huge sand castle. Then, he
collected seashells and rocks. After that, he went swimming with his
brother. Ryan had a wonderful time at the beach.
ANTHONY VISITS NICK
On Sunday, Anthony went over to Nick's house to play
basketball. They played a game of one-on-one. Anthony made six
baskets, but Nick made eight. Nick was the winner. After the game, both
boys went inside to have some snacks and watch television.
boys went inside to have some snacks and watch television.
baskets, but Nick made eight. Nick was the winner. After the game, both
basketball. They played a game of one-on-one. Anthony made six
On Sunday, Anthony went over to Nick's house to play
ANTHONY VISITS NICK
brother. Ryan had a wonderful time at the beach.
collected seashells and rocks. After that, he went swimming with his
beach with his family. First, Ryan built a huge sand castle. Then, he
(indent) Do you know what Ryan did last weekend? He went to the
INDEPENDENT ACTIVITY
RYAN’S WEEKEND
Answers may vary
PRE-TEST
ACTIVITY
REVISING PROOFREADING EDITING
Checking the spelling Review, alter and amend Focus on surface and
and grammar Formatting
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INDEPENDENT ACTIVITY GENERALIZATION
Answers may vary
1. B
15. B
2. D
14. B
3. A PERFORMANCE TASK
13. B
4. A Answers may vary
12. D
5. C (Should have drafts 1 and 2
11. D
6. A to check their revising/ editing/
10. D
7. C proofreading skills)
9. A
8. A 15. B
8. A
9. A 14. A
7. C
10. D 13. B
6. A
11. D 12. C
5. C
12. D 11. A
4. A
13. B 10. A
3. A
14. B 9. A
2. D
15. B 8. B
1. B
7. A
6. C
5. A
4. C
3. A
2. C
1. C
POST-TEST
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Office Address: Ecology Center, West Poblacion, City of Naga,
Cebu
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