Ans1
Persuasive Letter
Persuasive Letter is a letter written to persuade an organisation/s
or individual/s towards accepting the writer's (sender’s) issue,
interest or perspective. It can be written to any type of
organisation i.e. school, bank, college, NGO, municipality etc. The
individuals can be a director, CEO, government official etc. The
motive of the persuasion letter is to ‘Get your work done’ in
layman terms.
As amaan, I am going to write a persuasive letter to
management
10th October
By Amaan
To senior management
Subject -regarding office communication timings Which should occur
between 9am- 7pm
Respected sir
I am amaan team leader of your company. I hope you are fine . I want
to communicate you regarding a serious issue which is happening now.
The pandemic has forced us to switch our homes to office space ehich it
fine in pandemic. Besides of comfortably wor6from home, this setup
has posed a serious inconvenience of blurring the boundaries between
working hours and personal time. Mails, phones and meetings at oddd
hours have devoured the personal boundaries.like so many other
people, I am also the victim of this situation. As a single parent and a
son of ailing mother,I am often at the stage of breaking point fue to this
setup.My personal space is fully disturbed due to this setup. I am not
able to take proper time to my mother and can’table to take care of
her.
Bring the team leader my major task is to communicate to the team
member and communicate between them my team and the higher
management. My most of the isspent conducting the meetings and
explaining the task to my team , coordinating between the
management and sometimes with communicating with the overseas
clients which usually occur at odd hours and generally after office hours
i.e, . This practice has been continuing from more then one and half
year . I am very disturbed because of this.
I request to to take strict guidelines for employees, regarding the office
comunication, which should occur between 9am-7pm (working hours)
unless there is an emergency or an international call. I hope to consider
my request. And will take an strict guidelines on this as soon as
possible. I will be very thankful to you if you do this. I will wait for your
action.
Thankyou
Amaan (team leader)
Ans2
Business communication etiquette
• Be timely. Show up on schedule to gatherings (set the caution on
your watch or telephone in the event that you really want an update)
and be prepared to make and acknowledge pre-booked telephone and
video calls. This shows you regard other participants' time and
timetables. When planning a gathering with worldwide partners, be
conscious of time-region contrasts and select a period appropriately.
• Avoid meandering aimlessly and digressions. Being brief aides
keep things moving and forestalls pointless postponements and
dissatisfactions. When checking out business correspondence on a
worldwide scale, it likewise keeps away from misconceptions when
utilizing territorially based casual language. When composing,
Grammarly can rapidly examine content and give ideas to further
developing clearness and brevity.
• Keep correspondence proficient. Being a deferential, proficient
communicator isn't simply shrewd—your business. Stay away from
obscenities, language that might be hostile to other people, and
excessively close to home or advance remarks or signals. Keep an
agreeable, considerate disposition sooner rather than later.
Continuously allude back to your image style guide—and in case there
isn't one, consider making one. With Grammarly Business, chiefs can
make an inherent custom style guide that the apparatus would then be
able to reference when filtering broad substance, further developing
consistency and instructing clients on organization best practices.
• Avoid and debilitate tattle. As in any group environment, tattle in
the working environment can rapidly sabotage resolve and dissolve
positive group elements. Show others how its done and try not to enjoy
it, and (pleasantly) deter others from doing as such should it arise
during natural discourse.
• Encourage talk. Correspondence ought to be a two-way road.
Urge colleagues to pose inquiries at whatever point essential, give
input, and volunteer their contemplations and thoughts. Give close
consideration when they do, cautiously considering their reactions prior
to giving your own.
• Know your crowd. Sooner rather than later, tailor what you need
to say to the individual (or individuals) you're saying it to. The nearer
your message lines up with their inclinations and needs, the more
adequately it will accomplish the ideal outcome.
• Choose the right correspondence channel. It tends to be hard to
tell which correspondence channel is best for which message. At times,
this will be self-evident; an individual discussion, for instance, ought not
be the subject of a far reaching show. Be that as it may, perceiving
when a discussion warrants an email versus a video call, for instance,
can assist with guaranteeing your message is emphatically gotten.
Rewritten sentence
A. Any individual who has not pre-enrolled for the gathering isn't
permitted to go to it.
B. Everybody is mentioned to bring along their life partner on the event
of brilliant celebration festivity of the association.
C. The Asian chief and old bookkeeper will address our organization in
the gathering.
D. Customer conviction is one of the main attributes of a powerful sales
rep.
E. John is the most appropriate possibility for this work profile.
F. Any harmed products are not exposed to a discount.
G. The mail you drafted, should be corrected.
H. There is a need of more labor to finish this venture proficiently.
Ans3a
Supposedly inappropriate elements in the paragraph:
1. The content developer has used some patriarchal comments which
represent children and women as submissive of men.
2. The content developer has mentioned the category of clients in such
a way that it repels a majority of bag packers and even young crowd.
3. It has shown by the content that mountains and dunes is not a
facility or a stay but a luxury for those staying with them, which creates
a sense of inferiority in the guest.
4. It has been clearly mentioned that the place is expensive hence
people will be skeptical before bookings, as it's definitely not a pocket
friendly option.
5. The content developer has repeatedly boasted about the in house
services and has no discussion of nature, peace or serenity that these
locations provide to a guest.
6. In the hospitality industry each and every client is referred as guest
to make them feel at home, however here it is referred to as a
customer.
Ans3b
I would rewrite the paragraph like mentioned below as there is so many
inappropriate elements.
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home like food any time of the day at the state of the art kitchens
attached to your accommodation.
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like no other.
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