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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life.
Others think it is better to work for different organisations.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people#work#organisation#life#organisations

Workers

prefer to

work

in

one

workplace for their entire

work

life

because it is comfortable for them to give their best

work

. I believe that
workers

should explore many different workplaces to

gain

more

skills

. Many

people

are stuck in

one

establishment for their whole

life

because they are used to the

place

and the other

workers

they have been working with. That helps them to give their best in the

work

they are doing, which will help them to upgrade their salary easily. And
they don’t need to travel to too many cities and settle in

one

city because it helps them to stay relaxed and comfortable with their

life

For example

, many teachers

work

in

one

school all their working

life

because they are comfortable with the school and the other teachers they

work

with. I believe that

workers

should

work

for different establishments because it helps them to have a new

experience

in a new

place

. That will help them to get more

skills

from the new

people

they

work

with because they have a lot of knowledge about the workplace they have
been working in. Gaining more

experience

from others helps

workers

develop their potential at

work

. By

experience

, in different places,

people

can
gain

more knowledge about the

work

they are doing.

For instance

, many computer engineers

work

in different companies to

gain

more knowledge and

skills

in different coding languages to help them develop their coding

skills

. In conclusion, working in

one

place

gives some

people

a relaxing

life

because they are used to the

place

they are living in, but I do believe

workers

should

work

for different places to

gain

new
experience

and

skills

icherryran

Jul 30, 2025

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coherence and cohesion

Try to use clearer topic sentences in each paragraph to guide the reader
better.

task achievement

Include more specific examples to support your points in detail.

task achievement

Make sure to elaborate on your opinion with more reasons or evidence.

task achievement

You presented your opinion clearly at the beginning and in the conclusion.

task achievement

The essay includes reasons explaining both views, showing a clear

understanding of the topic.

Fully explain your ideas

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o Sentence 2 - Example

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o Sentence 1 - Topic sentence

o Sentence 2 - Example

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more

Word repetition

meeting the goal of 3 or fewer

Grammar mistakes

detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

283 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

 Longevity

 Corporate ladder

 Adaptability

 Comfort zone

 Professional network

 Diverse skill set

 Industry exposure
  Innovation

 Resilience

 Seniority

 Job market

 Career trajectory

 Company culture

 Professional growth

 Job security

 Promotion prospects

 Cross-functional experience

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